Second Draft of my Music Video:

Here is the second draft of my music video. I have made considerable changes using the audience feedback from my first draft. I have taken out the random shots towards the end and shot and put in a positive ending of Beth getting over the death through the help of her friend. I had planned to do this in pre-production in my treatment sheet but did not include it in my storyboard as I changed my mind and thought it'd be more effective to end on the grave. However after watching it, I decided that it was important to have some aspect of friendship as it is the main thing that will appeal to the target audience.

Anymore comments are welcome :)